man i just want check please! to be adapted into a netflix original and i want it done RIGHT
i have so many ideas for this ho shit:
MOVE-IN DAY//SERIES PREMIERE: all these wide shots of bitty absorbing the pretty ivy league campus and the pretty boys on this campus. a guy hands him his ID and says “the picture you picked doesn’t do you justice” and bitty gets so so blushy and then bitty’s mom pulls him away, cause they gotta go check out the gift shop!!! (boys will flirt with bitty So Much)
juxtaposition of the pretty ivy league campus with the gross frat haus
over the course of the season haus gets more homey??? it’s like a subtle change…like the lighting around it gets warmer and it looks generally cleaner
bitty’s roommate is a character. he’s a cs major and when bitty comes back from that first team meeting to this guy, he ends up being just. not a huge conversationalist. and bitty’s like “….ok!”
later when jack zimmermann starts banging on the door for bitty to come to checking practice the roommate has like. the best afterthought line. i haven’t figured out what it is yet.
since everyone who read the comic already knows how graduation in year 2 ends id draw out the moment between bitty leaving and bad bob’s monologue so that you see the alumni event and then bitty packing in this transcendent montage and you’re like “wait WHAT!!??? WHY ISN’T JACK RUNNING ARE THEY CHANGING TH–” for a little bit
also. ALSO. auditory parallel with jack hearing bitty sing “halo” through the walls of the haus and when jack opens the door, the song is less muffled
actually seeing the sunlight through the window as they kiss
SEASON 2 PREMIERE – COLD OPEN could be bitty looking at his cellphone as a callback to last season or like his cellphone buzzing with a text from jack on the counter – so we as an audience immediately know that jack and bitty have been keeping up with each other – as he’s getting ready and then jack and bitty see each other for the first time. suzanne’s like “oh i’ll pull out my camera” but they don’t take their eyes off of each other. and then we flash to ransom at samwell asking bitty “so what did you do over the summer?” and then we cut to the theme song cause we all know what who he did
and then the whole episode’s madison and then we cut back to samwell, bitty staring off dreamily, “oh, same old stuff.”
i. want. an entire episode called “34 Days” but we need to find kids who look like the 17-year-old versions of the actors who play jack and parse and maaannnnnnnn that’s gonna be tough
so some twitter events become episodes (spring c + bitty’s birthday so like ONE HALF of “kiss the ice” basically) but then some comics get consolidated into one episode (i.e. “the closet story”, “parse”, other half of “kiss the ice”, “graduation” and “goodbye for the summer”)
at the end of the episode before parse johnson says something like “you know shit’s about to get crazy when it starts in media res”
i got tired of typing but i have More Ideas
*bangs fist on table* •EPIC KEGSTER EPISODE WITH BEER PONG •POST CREDIT SCENES FOR EXTRAS •POP UP EFFECTS FOR WHEN BITTY TWEETS
YES YES I WANNA SEE THE BEER PONG TOO and yes, the johnson line i wrote in the last bullet point was considered with post-credit scenes in mind anD ALSO
hockey shit with r & h is a little short that starts off some episodes and ransom and holster are basically filming it with this low-grade shaky camera and in the butts one they’re whispering behind the camera and just PANNINGCLOSER AND CLOSER TO JACK’S BUTT, like zooming in and out to get the right focus but also to get as much butt-detail as possible, and then they pan to the mirror and YOU CAN SEE THE EXACT SECOND WHEN JACK NOTICES AND THEN IT JUST CUTS OFF THE LITERAL SECOND WHEN RANSOM SAYS “i think he saw us”
the pop-up effect happens with texts in house of cards too and one of the ideas i had for the madison ep was just a cold open of jack and bitty texting each other over the summer!
in addition to seeing clips of actual vlogs you actually see bitty make the vlogs so in “parse” you actually see bitty walk in his room, set up the camera and press record, and my idea for Women, Food, and American Culture was to have bitty’s voiceover the second after he Realizes and the real-time dialog between jack and bitty is something like
bitty: i uh…i have to go do [lame excuse]
jack: oh–
[bitty runs upstairs into his room and collapses on his bed]
and then bitty’s voiceover is “never fall in love with a straight boy” wHAM end of episode
IVE THOUGHT ABOUT THIS SO MUCH YOU DONT EVEN KNOW
The opening sequence is like, I’m imagining something like the Baccano! opening credits, short and sweet with like 70s style freeze-shots of the main characters staring at the camera with their name/number superimposed on the screen, set to bouncy cheesy pop music (Bitty’s pregame playlist??) and TONS of visual parallels between hockey / baking / college like
Countdown timer in the rink transitioning to an oven timer
Team assembling, someone tosses a stick, mid-throw transitions into Bitty catching a rolling pin or vice versa
someone pouring their drink into those awful red plastic cups, person lifts cup to drink then transitions to like, idk, one of the teammates chugging water/gatorade at practice
Like panning down a row of sriracha. Just an entire row of sriracha
While these words are superimposed: “BASED ON THE COMIC BY NGOZI UKAZU”
Just zooming in and out all around the Haus, with the credits scrawled on the wall in the basement next to the bylaws as well as in various places
While I think this’ll look AMAZING in Live-action as a homage to the comic itself it’d be cool to have little animated bits, maybe for the closing/opening credits
Anyway thats all I have they’re corny but (oh golly I’d love to storyboard that sometime if i had the chance sighhh)
More things I’d like:
The meet the team scene should probably be drawn out longer so that we the audience can get a better feel for all the guys’ personalities–like it’ll cut forward to Bitty sitting in his room in the dark going “Well. I met the boys.” and then flashback again to the entire thing with them just dEVOURING that pie while Bitty looks on with hesitancy and disgust
Just long shots that contrast Bitty’s height in the beginning to emphasize that whole “fish out of water” uncomfortableness thing–as the series goes on and Bitty becomes more and more integral to the team it’s less emphasized
When Jack is introduced–pretty much exactly the same as in the comics–first we see him pass in front of the camera, then cut to just him setting his tray on the table, then slowly tilt pan all the way up to his beautiful face with his very unamused expression before delivering his iconic “Bittle. You need to eat more protein.”
Cameos from actual hockey players might be too much to ask for but it’ll be hilarious
On a more serious note:
Since Jack is going to spend a whole lot of Year 1 being a petty dingus to Bitty there’s going to be a point halfway through (or earlier) that will probably be the “Make Jack A Sympathetic Character” episode which will probably be a combination of the comic episodes “Bad Bob” and “The Hockey Prince” but to make the transition much less abrupt there will need to be more foreshadowing of course
Earlier during practice Jack gets frustrated about sOMETHING, probably the fact that Bitty/the rest of the team isn’t doing ENOUGH to his standards and is being especially irritated about it that Coach Murray or the others maybe takes him aside for a moment and says a line thats like “Son, I know this is really important to you but u need to be mature about this,” cue Jack respectfully acknowledging it and trying to do better but still continuing to be pissy
THE HOCKEY PRINCE SEQUENCE OKay okay I have a lot of feels on how it should go, obviously I think the narration should stay mostly the same but I feel like in a video format it can both reveal (and conceal) sO MUCH MORE
It’s a very strange sequence in how it’s placed in the narrative, we’re not sure WHO is telling the story so I think it’ll work best as an opening to a new episode perhaps.
Like it’ll be like that stylized animated format that emulates the golden book style Ngozi uses for that episode, show stylized little Jack running around with his famous Hockey King dad in a golden shiny kingdom of trophies and paparazzi, then transition to like the dark bedroom where the shadows of his anxieties creep up on him
when it gets to the “And he slew trolls!!” Jack w/ the Memorial cup + PARSE CAMEO! To the side of the composition so he’s not emphasized but he’s THERE
Show Jack in the hospital, and here I have some ideas to show the whole unreliable narrator in Jack’s mind–show Jack sitting on his bed during the “So he was banished. The Kingdom would not have him…” scene. Show Bad Bob slowly coming inside, as if trying to talk to Jack, but Jack turns away and Bob sadly leaves the room, while the narration goes “He was a disappointment to the King”–idk how it would work but it would be interesting to show that slight inconsistency between the narration and the actual events (i.e., Bob trying to reach out and comfort his son, Jack not being able to accept it)
Extra thoughts (this is too long but whatever)
Shows and movies that take place at a college often get filmed at UCLA because it’s pretty accessible and is very generic-college looking, which also happens to be my school so for like the typical background campus scenes it will most likely be at UCLA, dressed up to LOOK like New England (snowy shots will be somewhere else ofc)
ANYWAY I can’t wait until this can be a REAL THING, obviously i feel like the comic would have to finish first so anyone who wants to develop this can actually have complete material to work with so they can do it RIGHT…sighh
oh oh this addition is amazing
I have also been thinking about the way that Parse is introduced into the show? As pointed out above he would obviously have to be in the Hockey Prince montage, but to the side, but I do think that he needs to get more attention, esp. if we want to understand in season 2 why bits dislikes him (the whole ‘bless his heart‘ attitude)
I mean I will honestly be the first to argue that Parse is not an antagonist per se but he is a very interesting character, more like a juxtaposition somehow? He adds so much conflict and ~drama~ around Jack as a character and that is so interesting to me. I think he would be one of the best plot devices to in fact show the sympathetic side of Jack
Honestly Jack is one of those characters that you learn to love over the course of the show…like Bitty hates him at first but then falls in love with him over the course of the first season, and you want the audience to go right along with him
So the Bad Bob/Hockey Prince would be the first episode where you get the Dark Jack Zimmermann Backstory and this would have to feature Parse as he is such an important part of Jack’s past
But Parse is also the great Contrast – he is where Jack would have been were it not for the overdose, and the show would have to show that somehow, but not to obvious, at least not to start with
Just any flashbacks to Jack’s past (which could be actual flashbacks but also ‘source material‘ for example a youtube video that Bitty comes across) would contain Parse by Jack’s side. The announcer refers to them as like ~an unstoppable force~ and ~unbreakable duo~ [cut to Jack sitting by himself in his room]
And remember that comic where commentators talk about Jack? Doing like a similar scene to that, the team sitting around having fun, drinking a beer, and in the background there are shots of Parse, and Jack goes from actively participating in the conversation to watching the screen, his face growing somber
And then obviously we Meet Parse at the kegster and we actually see the scenes where the team (including Bitty!) takes selfies with him and we see Lardo beating him at beer pong and he just seems like this laid-back cool dude
Cut to Bitty overhearing the conversation in which Parse comes off as a jerk and like- kind of desperate at the same time? and then Parse and Jack come out of Jack’s room, all rumpled (because honestly they have been making out) and with Jack’s feelings written all over his face
Only for his face to turn back into a mask when he sees Bitty
and the seed for bitty’s hate is obviously planted right there
and a tweet pops up that reads “that awkward moment when you thought some was really cool but you find out you were so wrong about them“
(also this is obviously where one of the hints is planted that Jack isn’t really all that straight. which. there should be several of those throughout the season so the Kiss doesn’t come as too much of a shock to viewers)
but yeah generally Parse being like a big reason for Jack’s angst and his growth throughout the first season, give me all of it
Writing books often exhort you to “write a shitty first draft,” but I always resisted this advice. After all,
I was already writing shitty drafts, even when I tried to write good ones. Why go out of my way to make them shittier?
A shitty first draft just kicks the can down the road, doesn’t it? Sooner or later, I’d have to write a good draft—why put it off?
If I wrote without judging what I wrote, how would I make any creative choices at all?
That first draft inevitably obscured my original vision, so I wanted it to be at least slightly good.
Writing something shitty meant I was shitty.
So for years, I kept writing careful, cramped, painstaking first drafts—when I managed to write at all. At last, writing became so joyless, so draining, so agonizing for me that I got desperate: I either needed to quit writing altogether or give the shitty-first-draft thing a try.
Turns out everything I believed about drafting was wrong.
For the last six months, I’ve written all my first drafts in full-on don’t-give-a-fuck mode. Here’s what I’ve learned so far:
“Shitty first draft” is a misnomer
A rough draft isn’t just a shitty story, any more than a painter’s preparatory sketch is just a shitty painting. Like a sketch, a draft is its own kind of thing: not a lesser version of the finished story, but a guide for making the finished story.
Once I started thinking of my rough drafts as preparatory sketches, I stopped fretting over how “bad” they were. Is a sketch “bad”? And actually, a rough draft can be beautiful the same way a sketch is beautiful: it has its own messy energy.
Don’t try to do everything at once
People who make complex things need to solve one kind of problem before they can solve others. A painter might need to work out where the big shapes go before they can paint the details. A writer might need to decide what two people are saying to each other before they can describe the light in the room or what those people are doing with their hands.
I’d always embraced this principle up to a point. In the early stages, I’d speculate and daydream and make messy notes. But that freedom would end as soon as I started drafting. When you write a scene, I thought, you have to start with the first word and write the rest in order. Then it dawned on me: nobody would ever see this! I could write the dialogue first and the action later; or the action first and the dialogue later; or some dialogue and action first and then interior monologue later; or I could write the whole thing like I was explaining the plot to my friend over the phone. The draft was just one very long, very detailed note to myself. Not a story, but a preparatory sketch for a story. Why not do it in whatever weird order made sense to me?
Get all your thoughts onto the page
Here’s how I used to write: I’d sit there staring at the screen and I’d think of something—then judge it, reject it, and reach for something else, which I’d most likely reject as well—all without ever fully knowing what those things were. And once you start rejecting thoughts, it’s hard to stop. If you don’t write down the first one, or the second, or the third, eventually your thought-generating mechanism jams up. You become convinced you have no thoughts at all.
When I compare my old drafts with my new ones, the old ones look coherent enough. They’re presentable as stories. But they suck as drafts, because I can’t see myself thinking in them. I have no idea what I wanted that story to be. These drafts are opaque and airless, inscrutable even to me, because a good 90% of what I was thinking while I wrote them never made it onto the page.
These days, most of my thoughts go onto the page, in one form or another. I don’t waste time figuring out how to say something, I just ask, “what are you trying to say here?” and write that down. Because this isn’t a story, it’s a plan for a story, so I just need the words to be clear, not beautiful. The drafts I write now are full of placeholders and weird meta notes, but when I read them, I can see where my mind is going. I can see what I’m trying to do. Consequently, I no longer feel like my drafts obscure my original vision. In fact, their whole purpose is to describe that vision.
Drafts are memos to future-you
To draft effectively, you need a personal drafting style or “language” to communicate with your future self (who is, of course, the author of your second draft). This language needs to record your ideas quickly so it can keep up with the pace of your imagination, but it needs to do so in a form that will make sense to you later. That’s why everyone’s drafts look different: your drafting style has to fit the way your mind works.
I’m still working mine out. Honestly, it might take a while. But recently, I started writing in fragments. That’s just how my mind works: I get pieces of sentences before I understand how to fit them together. Wrestling with syntax was slowing me down, so now I just generate the pieces and save their logical relationships for later.Drafting effectively means learning these things about yourself. And to do that, you can’t get all judgmental. You can’t fret over how you should be writing, you just gotta get it done.
Messy drafts are easier to revise
I find that drafting quickly and messily keeps the story from prematurely “hardening” into a mute, opaque object I’m afraid to change. I no longer do that thing, for instance, where I endlessly polish the first few paragraphs of a draft without moving on. Because how do you polish a bunch of fragments taped together with dashes? A draft that looks patently “unfinished” stays malleable, makes me want to dig my hands in and move stuff around.
You already have ideas
Sitting down to write a story, I used to feel this awful responsibility to create something good. Now I treat drafting simply as documenting ideas I already have—not as creation at all, but as observation and description. I don’t wait around for good words or good ideas. I just skim off whatever’s floating on the surface and write it down. It’s that which allows other, potentially better ideas to surface.
As a younger writer, my misery and frustration perpetuated themselves: suppressing so many thoughts made my writing cramped and inhibited, which convinced me I had noideas, which made me even more afraid to write lest I discover how empty inside I really was. That was my fear, I guess: if I looked squarely at my innocent, unvetted, unvarnished ideas, I’d see how bad they truly were, and then I’d have to—what, pack up and go home? Never write again? I don’t know. But when I stopped rejecting ideas and started dumping them onto the page, the worst didn’t happen. In fact, it was a huge relief.
(Just thought I’d share this in case someone finds it useful!)
This is basically all the advise my speech therapist has given me so far, just condensed and without the exercises and it’s really amazing advice! I’d also suggest that if you have a smartphone get an app called voice analyst because it gives you feedback on your average pitch as well as showing you how low your pitch gets, and for me and lots of other girls an issue in passing as that we can get our voices up to around 200hz but several times per sentence drop back to like 120 and it shows you when you’re doing that so you can focus on it.
Man, one of the big reasons why Spirited Away really grabbed me, was that I felt that Chihiro did most of the same things that I would’ve done if I was her.
On retrospect, certain things are really obvious now.
so please PLEASE stop saying Miyazaki used the film as a metaphor for brothels and child sex trafficking. if you want to read it that way, whatever, but know his actual intentions. Miyazaki isn’t a dark mastermind. just a regular narrative genius.
I’ve been reading a lot of Check Please fic lately, and while they tend to be well researched on the actual hockey gameplay, they are not always accurate when it comes to some specific college hockey conventions. So since I go to a school that plays ECAC hockey, and happen to know a good bit about the team from being in the band (side note – where are my Samwell Pep Band headcanons? Come on guys), I figured I would share.
The size of an international rink is 200 ft by 100 ft (61m by 30.5m)
The size of an international rink is 200 ft by 85 ft (61m by 26m)
There are three periods in a game
Each period lasts for 20 minutes with a 17 minute period break in between
“In the National Hockey League, between stoppages of play, teams have 18 seconds (five seconds for the visiting team, eight seconds for the home team, five seconds to line up at the faceoff location) to substitute their players, except during TV timeouts.” [x]
TV Time outs are 2 minutes long and occur 3 times per period (In the NHL)
There are 6 players allowed on the ice per team at one time (1 LW, 1 Center, 1 RW, 2 D-men and 1 goalie)
A shutout is when a goalie doesn’t allow any goals in during a game. For example the score could be 3-0
A shootout is a way to break the tie after 5 minutes of overtime.
Each team names three shooters. If the game remains tied after the three shooters are done, teams continue shooting in “sudden death” mode. The game cannot end until each team has taken the same number of shots. [x]
Too Many Men on the Ice (this video gives a good visual of what this penalty looks like. There are 6 players plus the goalie on the ice for one team which is against the rules.)
G =Goals. A goal is awarded to the last player on the scoring team to touch the puck prior to the puck entering the net. Note: Goals scored during a shootout do not count towards a player’s goal total.
A =Assists. An assist is awarded to the player or players (maximum of two) who touch the puck prior to the goal, provided no defender plays or possesses the puck in between.
P or PTS =Points. The sum total of goals and assists.
GW = Game-winning goals. After the final score has been determined, the goal which leaves the winning team one goal ahead of its opponent is the game-winning goal (example: if Team A beats Team B 8-3, the player scoring the fourth goal for Team A receives credit for the game-winning goal). Note: Goals scored during a shootout are not credited as game-winning goals.
W = Wins.A goaltender receives a win if he is on the ice when his team scores the game-winning goal.
L = Losses. A goaltender receives a loss if he is on the ice when the opposing team scores the game-winning goal.
OT = Overtime or shootout losses. As of the 2005-06 NHL season, a goalie is credited with an “OT” if he is on the ice when the opposing team scores the game-winning goal in overtime or during a shootout.
GA = Goals against. Empty net goals do not count towards a goaltender’s goals against. Goals scored during a shootout do not count towards a goaltender’s goals against.
SO =Shutouts. If two goaltenders combine for a shutout, neither receives credit for the shutout. Instead it is recorded as a team shutout. If a regular season game is tied 0-0 at the end of overtime, both goaltenders are credited with a shutout, regardless of how many goals are scored in the shootout.
Team/League Stats:
A team’s stats are determined by their Win-Loss-Loss in Overtime record. For example: a team could be 12-5-4. That team would have 12 wins, 5 losses and 4 losses in overtime.
A team’s points are determined by their Win-Loss-Loss in Overtime record. Continuing on with the previous example, the team would have 28 points. Multiply the team’s winning record by 2 and add it to their OT loss record. (one point awarded for a loss in overtime) 24+4=28
An empty net goal occurs when a team scores a goal into a net with no goaltender present. This usually occurs in one of two different occasions:Usually in about the last two minutes of a game, if a team is within two goals, they will often pull the goalie, leaving the net defenseless, for an extra attacker, in order to have a better chance of scoring to either tie or get within one goal. If the team with the lead gets control of the puck they will often shoot at the net after clearing center ice. It is less common for a team to shoot from their own zone at an empty net because icing could occur if the shooter misses the net. Sometimes a team will pull their goalie when they are on a two-man advantage, even if not nearing the end of the game. With the team then gaining an advantage of six skaters to three, this will increase even further the chances of the team scoring. [x]
A goal is scored when the puck passes entirely across the red line painted between the goal posts and below the crossbar. A goal may be disallowed under the following circumstances:
the scoring team takes a penalty (except if the other team accidentally puts the puck into its own net untouched by the team to be penalized);
the puck is directed in by an attacker’s high stick (above the crossbar), or when the puck has been directed, batted, thrown or kicked into the net by an attacking player other than with a stick (angling one’s skate so the puck deflects off it into the goal is allowed).
goaltender interference (which can also result in a penalty)
the puck goes in after the Referee intends to stop play (e.g. the net has been dislodged)
the puck deflects off a referee or linesman and goes directly into the goal (exception to the rule that a puck hitting a referee or a linesman is still live)
a goal was allowed at the other end (this can happen if a video review clarifies a goal scored prior)
DO NOT EVER PARTICIPATE IN MEAN GOALIE CHANTS IT IS VERY RUDE (remember: love thy goalie)
The maximum number of players on an NHL roster is 23.
The diameter of a hockey puck is three inches (ooh fun fact 😀 )
Regulation hockey nets are six feet wide and four feet tall.
82 games are played per team in one season (NHL)
There are 30 teams in the NHL and they are divided into two divisions: The Eastern and Western Conferences
There are 16 teams in the Eastern Conference
There are 14 teams in the Western Conference
The NHL regular season starts in October and ends in early April
DON’T EVER CALL SOMEONE A PUCK SLUT/PUCK BUNNY. RESPECT ALL FANS!!
I know it’s a lot to take in, but hopefully you learned a little something about the sport. Remember: everyone has to start somewhere, you’ll catch on soon! Please feel free to add on to this list as I might have forgotten something!
just moving along like everyone else 